show dont tell

show don't tell!

these are my Six Senses we have to change and a bad sentence into something good and i'm not telling you what's happening i'm showing you

thomas was stunned as he ran through the rain in the dusk of night, As he turned a corner he froze solid as a rock.

gene was furios as his fists clenched and steam poured out his ears and his skin turned red.

ron started to tremble his lips went from a smile to a frown his eyes filled up with water and before you know it you are in a pool of salty tears.

marley was overjoyed when he ran outside jumping into his fathers arms.

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